Poem Dump

[Lerouge]

I was going through some of my old poems and stuff and thought I should share. I don't title a lot of my work so I apologize in advance if that annoys anyone.

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You look in the mirror and see someone you never wanted to be
Your eyes glazed over living in a world of fantasy
What can you do when you don't know the truth
Behind everything you do, another change to your life
Something you could never predict and can barely survive.

Who are you that runs circles around in my dreams
A girl I thought I knew, but never thought loves me
A face in a crowd that seemed to stand out from the rest
But I see now that your something I can't stand.

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You told me that your life was a mess
And said that I made it close to the best
All those words you said to me in the night
Turned out to be jokes can you find
The truth of what you really felt for me
Or shall I look for another remedy for sleep.

I wanna look back and say that
I had a dream to be with you
Now I walk this hidden path
Wondering what I will do.
Are you looking to save me
But I promise you its not true
I'll never come back so enjoy that
I'm singing my heart out to you.

As I wander by the streets that we passed
I think about the times that we had
Memories flood into my mind... into my mind
Then I realized its just a waste of time
When I look around and think of my past
I just want to run away from the pain at last.

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GREEN HEAVEN
It was just a look in your eyes
Something that told me you were mine
Did I see it wrong? Oh did I see it wrong?
I come to the end of a broken road
And find of end, my final home
In the flames of eternity.

I look down the barrel of an empty gun
Smiling and Wondering when the end will come
Could it be true, that the world can go on
Or is it just another joke in my mind.
Why do I keep searching so long
When there is nothing to find.

This is my final song
My last chance to change the world
It's never enough...
Oh no I'm just not enough.
This is my final melody
One more dance before I am free.
Before I am free.

Pull the trigger and it's gone
The darkness fills his mind welcome
To your new home in the clouds of hell
The fire of pain and a tortured soul
Where has that look of love gone
Oh where has my heart gone.

A demon's voice fills the room
Body floats in the pool of smoke
Is this my final home in heaven
My final resting place in the green heaven
Oh... the music begin's to die down
Welcome to my final bow in Green Heaven.

[Mockingjay]

some words are a bit repetitive (using heaven twice at the end of the last poem, the word "that" being used in the same stanza in the second verse of the second stanza). Rhyming is really difficult, but you manage to pull it off nicely. Could use a little more work though. (With me, whenever I try to rhyme its like MASSIVE FAIL. You do it well, so excuse me while I try to hide my jealousy xD)

You should use a lot more metaphors in your poems because you master it pretty efficiently.

You master rhythm, that's for sure. I have SUCH a hard time trying to keep a steady tempo. I end up writing in broken rhythms.

Overall these were pretty good. Post more! I can't wait to see what you do.

[Lerouge]

Thank you for the comments ^^. These were kinda old from when I was in high school and at the time I had hopes of being a mini song writer hence some of the words/phrases being repeated. I do have one more I will post its one I wrote in dedication to a friend that passed away in a car accident.

Sometimes it only comes for a second
As a brief flash before my eyes
Before vanishing as if it never happened
Letting me continue on my path of sighs.

Sometimes it causes me to stop in my tracks
My destination no longer seems to matter
Just a simple skip in my life's soundtrack
But it slowly disappears as my heart slowly shatters.

Somtimes it breaks me down and I cry
The world no longer seems real
Tears run down my face as I stare into the sky
Why did I have to lose you in a flash of steel?

Sometimes I think of you and simply smile
Your memory fills my soul with joy
Your smile, your life, your love, your soul
My respect for you is completely beyond my control.

[Mockingjay]

OH.

MY.

GOODNESS.


... this is way too pretty to be here. This is like insanely good. Urgh, stupid Lerouge. Now I have to try to write better poetry because I'm getting mad jealous. DUDEEEE!!! The first stanza was FUCKING AMAZING. AHH that's insane.

[Lerouge]

Heh t.thank you ^^ I am glad someone likes them I didn't think it was that amazing or anything *blush*

[Mockingjay]

I LOVED IT!!!!

[Flex]

REALLY good. -che-
LOVED it.

[Lerouge]

Eternal Amore

Losing my faith falling for things
Another lie you sang out to me
Hold on to love looking to my dreams
On a lonely path of my destiny
I told you everything would be alright
No need to fear the dark at night
Hoping I can find you lost tonight
Looking for someone to call your home.

When do I get my final chance
To make it in this world of love
Who will share my final dance
And when will I sing my song
I dance until I can't take no more
I dance until I soar above the clouds
flying high as a bird lost in amore,
Eternal amore.

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Everytime I look for a way to escape it all
A home in the clouds of man
Where the birds always sing
And the soul begins to spread it's wings.

One word is enough to destroy it all
A simple sound that should have never been
Heart break, love shakes, and life begins to fade
Why did the happiness have to go away

Rain drops and lightning flashes
Tears drop and the soul crashes
I look to you for the freedom I crave
That beautiful flame that I cannot escape.

Seconds pass and sleep never comes
The clocks path always watches my acts
Trees grow around me filling the room
Fire emerges and once again I am alone thinking of you.

Ashes fall from the demon's bowls
An angels gift tainted by evil's hands
Lights begin to flash and life starts to erupt
Yet slowly and softly they settle as dust in the grass.


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A goal to find a stop to time
Looking for freedom
Freedom of mind
Light flickers from a broken bulb
A red rose dies and life is done
As the guitar plays the song of the dead.

Children scream to me from their bed
Waiting for their untimely end
I'll place you gently in
Take you on the trip
To your final home with my soul
Your smokey embrace turns me cold.

A wandering spirit sings the blues
The lights vanish and
My heart breaks in two
Oh baby, his words call out to you
A simple melody of love
A memory of a heart once shared by two.

[mere]

Amazing! Your very good at this!

[Mockingjay]

The last poem.... sheer brilliance. I don't really know how to talk about love poems. Love stuffs isn't really my forte, but you manage to make it likable.

Fave lines:

"Take you on the trip
To your final home with my soul
Your smokey embrace turns me cold."

AND

"Light flickers from a broken bulb
A red rose dies and life is done
As the guitar plays the song of the dead."


SO DARN BEAUTIFUL!!!!

[Lerouge]

Words don't seem to come
A life destroyed under the sun
Where can I go for help.
Nothing seems to work
The pain just stays and stays
Are you gone again?
Leaving nothing but a broken soul
Alone once again the smoke settles in
Controlling my being and my love
What do I do now
It has all become to old to help
Maybe one more light of the flame
Who knows what it will do
A world created in the darkness
Of happiness and trees
Can I stay here forever and live pain free
No the darkness will come again
Envelope the beauty whole
Rose petals fall and burst into flames
Leaving burn marks on the floor
Small reminders of what once was
And what will never again be
I gave you everything and you walked away
Was it a joke or just a phase
Maybe you will be back into my arms
Someday back into my heart
Lost in the world of flames


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Trapped for eternity in this mask
Pretending everything will just pass
One simple lie after another
Losing sense of the truth all together.

Nothing ever changes, it is all the same
No one ever helps me, they are all in the fast lane
One step at a time is all it takes
But the beginning is the hardest when you have no faith.

Those words you spoke were songs to me
Filling me soul with sweet melodies
Where did they go?

Here I am on the road again
Dark destruction covers my path
Where do I go?

I shout into the night your name
Two broken hearts and silence remains
My personal angel from above
Here to destroy my soulful love.

The chase is always full of endless fun
A goal for which you make another run
A finish line of comfort and pleasure
But once it is gone, how will I be sure?

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Fly with me above the clouds,
Simply hold my hand and don't look down.
You'll never know where life can take you,
Pain and sorrow can no longer break you.
Open your eyes and look around,
Let your soul be overwhelmed by the sound.
Bells ring and children sing,
Your lost in a world full of beautiful things.
Nothing ever seems the same again,
Your life had fallen apart but then,
Someone's voice called out to you,
Giving you a brand new feeling to pursue.

[Mockingjay]

The first poem needs punctuation and a bit of editing. Some lines can be broken down to achieve a better rhythm. xD Jeeze freaking Louise Lerouge, these women just seem like they take out clubs and beat you ruthlessly. xD And then other times, it's like you're trying to save them, be the hero, protect them in a sense.

You never lose your focus, but you could use some punctuation here and there. You've definitely mastered rhythm. xD I'm proud!