The Limbo (Poem)

[Totenglaut]

Flashes of memory
Not quite asleep
Not quite awake

The Limbo

Laughing
Crying
Screaming

The Limbo

Where has the time gone?
Not to me
Not to you

The Limbo

Not awake
Not asleep
Just halfway

The Limbo

Not awake
Not alseep
Nursery rhymes I've learned
"Lizzie Borden took and axe"
"Humpty Dumpty had a great fall"
"Tweedle Dum and Tweedle Dee resolved to have a battle"
"Round and round the mulberry bush"
"Do you know the muffin man?"
"Mary, Mary quite contrary"
"Little boy Blue"
The Limbo
The Limbo
The Limbo
The Limbo
The Limbo
The Limbo

In Limbo

[Mockingjay]

I like this. A lot. For. Serious. Though I think you did not need all of those The Limbo's after it. I think it would have been stronger if you ended it with "In Limbo" or just one "The Limbo" at the end.

[Totenglaut]

It's old looking back I don't really like the repetition as much. I might edit the end.

[Mary Sue]

I think it's great but I agree about cuting back the "The Limbo"s at the end. Great work though.