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    Apologies for the delay!

    Spoiler: Mai Erskine 
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    Hey Organis.

    Check out TheDoctor's character Ayame's power.

    He got Kinetic Energy Storage before you did, and I know Beta will not want duplicates...
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    While I appreciate Iwazuma's opinion, I will be doing a full review later today when I get back from visiting friends.
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    I admit, the similarities in nature are apparent, though I believed the more defensive usage, distinct limitations, and lack of any aura relations were enough to help it stand on its own.

    I'll be brainstorming another ability in the meantime in case this doesn't make the cut.
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    Alright. I read things over a few times and have come to the following conclusion.

    The power will definitely need changed. Even with the stipulations, it is just too similar to the power of an existing character. The martial art of choice is similar as well, though that is much less of a problem, as many different styles share similar roots.

    All in all, a solid character. Just get a power that is Ok'd and you should be all set.
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    Welp, there we go. I triple-checked to make sure this power or something similar wasn't already present. I changed Mai's fighting style as well.

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    I like the idea of friction alteration, but she seems to have an INCREDIBLE degree of control over her ability. These are teens, not veteran masters. Just that degree of control over such an ability would make her a B2-rank, at least. And that is with little to no combat training. Combined with MMA training, she might be as high as A3.

    So really, just take a look at aome of the current roster and NPCs to get a feel for how potent a power should be. I would say the two most potent powers belong to Junkiro and Miranda, as far as the main roster. The lower end of the powers are Troy and Vincento. So if you could modify it to fit somewhere between that spectrum, that would be marvelous.

    For real, I like the friction idea. Just too potent as it is written.
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    Ah. ' How embarrassing. I suppose it wouldn't make much sense, would it?

    Okay, so I hopefully toned her ability down enough, and I even added an extra year of experience to make things a little less wacky.

    I'm just relieved that you like the idea! Let me know if there's anything else that needs changing!
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    @Organis

    Sorry for the inactivity. I am quite busy lately with doctor appointments. Have a surgery coming up, so they want to make sure all the paperwork is in order, that my tests are consistent, and so on.

    Anyway. Power looks better, but I dont get why or how things have afterimages or vibrate like that when friction is increased or decreased. Nix that and you should be all set. Thanks again and I once more apologize for my delayed response.
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    Don't mind me!
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